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雅思大作文7分句型范文

雅思7分作文范文

雅思7分作文范文篇一:

Task:Some people think getting old is entirely bad. However, others think that life of the elderly in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Sample answer:

Getting old is a natural process that nobody really likes. When you reach a certain age, your physical conditions will inevitably deteriorate, and you may suffer from various kinds of diseases. When you retire, you will feel isolated because your previous work contacts may be all gone, then you may feel useless to the world. Furthermore, when you get too old, you’ll have to rely heavily on the support from others, either physically or emotionally, and your life will become a great pressure to your family and the whole society as well.

For all these bad things about getting old, many people argue that the life of the elderly today is much easier than in the past. In the first place, medical advances nowadays have made it possible for the old people to stay sound and healthy for quite a long while even after they retire. Diseases such as diabetes, hypertension and heart attack which might have inflicted pain on the old people are no longer serious problems for them. Then, with the widespread use of modern communication technology, old people today are no longer isolated from the world. Instead, by using their personal social media, they can always stay in touch with their families and friends, and share with them whatever they find interesting in their life. In this way, they do not really feel lonely or abandoned. Finally, the improved social wealth and pension system have also significantly reduced the pressure the old people pose to their families and communities.

So, I do agree that the old people today are enjoying a much more comfortable life than, say, thirty years ago (not to mention 100). That is why, instead of being worried about their retired life, many people even begin to expect their retirement to come, because they see this as a new beginning of their life. I think, as long as the old people have the right attitude, the modern world has indeed much to offer for their happy, enjoyable and rewarding retired life.

雅思7分作文范文篇二:

Task:Some people think international cooperation has brought benefits to world environment protection, while some people think more benefits have been brought to international business. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

参考范文:

International cooperation is now everywhere: the clothes we wear, the food we eat, the car we drive - all may be the effects of international cooperation. Yet when it comes to issue of which of the two, the environmental protection or the world business, benefits more from international cooperation, opinions vary from one individual to another.

Needless to say, international cooperation has helped a great deal in environmental protection. When dealing with some environmental issues like global warming, we need the joint effort of all countries across the world. Even in face of local issues, the new technology from other countries can be very helpful. When developing the high-speed train in China, for example, a technology called “air cleaner” from Russia is used, which has helped to reduce significantly the air pollution along the railway.

International cooperation has greatly expanded the world business as well. International cooperation can not only increase the productivity but also bring down the costs. It is because of international cooperation that American customers can enjoy the high-quality commodities from China at low prices and vice versa. Meanwhile, if countries work together, they can make their products and services more agreeable to the local people, which in turn will create more markets. For example, Microsoft products are all originally in English and were met with cold eyes 20 years ago when they entered China. It was only after Microsoft cooperated with Chinese programmers and converted the language to Chinese that its products have been widely accepted in China.

It is hard, though, to determine which has benefited more from international cooperation. My immediate response would be that world business is the greater beneficiary. After all, I have seen with my own eyes how the expanded world business as a result of the international cooperation has changed my life. Of course, I am fully aware as well that our environment is becoming better and better thanks to the international cooperation.

雅思7分作文范文篇三:老龄化增长的优缺点

In many countries, the number of elderly people is increasing fast. To what extent do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

Nowadays, owning to the improvement of living condition(这里习惯用复数), people can live much longer than before, which gives rise to the fast increasing number of elderly people. Some hold that this situation will result in a series of problems, such as social burden, population expansion and so on. While others insist that it agrees the development of modern society and brings many advantages. For my part, I take the latter side with(用for) the following reasons: (74words)

点评:开头稍微写的有点长,不过内容写的还不错。属于通过分析两种不同观点,最后阐述自己观点的写法。(此种写法在雅思大作文的第一段比较常见)

美中不足的是倒数第二句的错误比较明显!while是个连词,应该连接句子与句子,所以这里前面不应该是句号。后面agree是不及物动词,不能直接加宾语。

Firstly, elder people(一会儿elderly people,一会儿又elder people,这不是自相矛盾么!!!) are the fortune of our society. They have enough experiences and capabilities which are badly lacked and needed for our youth when dealing with all sorts of problems, they can still do well in their jobs. Especially(前面应该用逗号,然后这里小写) in some professions, such as teacher, doctor, scientist and so on, sometimes (前面应该用句号,然后这里大写)age means the authority and ability. When you see a doctor, do you prefer an elderly doctor with grey hair or a youth without mustache? (77words)

Secondly, elder people(同上) are the happiness of our society. Increasing number of elderly people is also the embodiment of our improving living quality, which shows our society run(应该第三人称单数)to the right and healthy direction, we(前面句号,这里大写) have more chance and time to serve our elderly people, and it’s the happiest time of all our life to accompany with(accompany是及物动词) our parents, grandparents and great grandparents. (63words)

Finally, elderly people are the lubricant of our society. They have good temper and enough patients(应该是patience吧) to do anything, they can help us to intercede(它是不及物动词,而且主要用人作宾语) social disputes, and they make our society much more harmonious which(前面最好有个逗号)makes for the construction of harmonious society.(43words)

正文段综合点评:此篇是典型的5段式作文的写作,正文段构思出三个分论点来证明自己的观点,的确在构思上花了不少心思。但是,这里我想提的是,还是两方面都分析一下会比较好一点。特别这篇文章是问优点多还是缺点多,那么最好是缺点讲一个,然后优点再讲两个。外国人喜欢这样的辩证分析。

其次,总的来说,作者的语言还是挺流畅的。但是似乎标点有问题,该用句号的时候用逗号,改用逗号的时候用句号,这个也要扣分的!

From mentioned above, the advantages of increasing number of elderly people are obvious more than it disadvantages(典型的Chinese English.应该说there are obviously more advantages than disadvantages.). Elderly people are not the burden of our society but the source of fortune, happiness and harmony of our society.(37words)

全文总评:

尽管总的来说语言水平还是很不错的,内容也写得很充实,但缺点是语言方面还是不够细腻。此文7分。

雅思写作7分考生的经验之谈:

雅思写作一直是中国考生的弱项,如何达到雅思7.0分?本文一名考生用自身经验告诉你。

雅思写作对我来说不是强项,写来写去头脑中的原创词汇还是高中学到的那些。所以这里咱们需要先明白一些东西:

雅思大作文7分句型

 

雅思大作文7分句型范文-2

很多人喜欢用模板,特别是十天雅思写作的书籍, 如果你的分数要求是6分以下,那你大胆的用,如果想上6分或7分甚至更高,就不要用那么多的模板,就算要用,也要挑与自己水平相适应的,不要挑些看起来很高级的,其实根本没用,反而会让你分数变低。。。 因为考官其实不是讨厌那些模板,他们反感的是高级的模板与你写的文章的语言水平根本不是同一个层次的,写出来的一篇文章里层次相差太大。想想看,读一篇中文的作文,如果每段的开头结尾转折的地方都用些华丽丽的词、文言文、诗句什么的啊,但是接下来却是用最普通易懂的语言,你看了会怎么想呢?

此外,有些人认为写作要拿高分,一定要用上很多高级词汇,以显示自己的高水准,其实不然。大家可以看看剑桥书后面的考官写的范文,其中并没有所谓的高级词汇,都是一些通俗易懂的,大家都认识的单词。但是为什么那种文章就是好呢?仔细读过几遍,你会发现,那些文章写的很通顺,观点阐述也很清晰,说白了,读起来就是很舒服。其实我们也可以做到。别在那些高难度词上纠缠啦,别到时侯用词不当,拼写错误,反而弄巧成拙。我们只要做到,观点表达清楚,用些熟悉的从句,来 1-2个倒装句,再加上恰到好处的连接词,一篇好文章就出炉啦。

所以,最有效的方法是拿别人的高分范文来分析,看他们是怎么开头和过度的。通过阅读其他考生的范文,总结出自己的开头段与中间连接的各种词组、句子结构等等。原因是:不像那些写书的专家,给出的模板看似简单,却恰恰要求你模板以外的文字要特别出众,否则就拿不到高分,而其他考生毕竟是考生,水平和你差不多,用他们的东西更能转化为自己的。

Tip1:不要用你自己都不熟悉的单词,不要制造机会让考官扣你分。

Tip2:小作文多用些模板,以减少时间;大作文请尽量少用模板,如果要用,请用些没那么多人用的模板。

Tip3:外国人喜欢有案例来支持你的论点,所以请多写一些有关你论点的新闻报道或研究数据来作为例子。

Tip4:词汇咱们不求多华丽,只要句子结构和连接词用的出彩些,高分也不是问题。

比如:很多人用for example,for instance来举例,其实你可以用according to the lastest research,或like Prof.xxx said in University of NewYork:xxxxx… 这些都是很普通却很有说服力的连接词。而书上模板往往让你背的是:for example,on the other hand等等。

再比如,我自己就从某考生那里借用了一种句型,现在用起来特别爽,很有气势!!

普通的写法:

Even if machine translation were able to eradicate all the language barriers between peoples, learning foreign languages still make sense.

加工后的句型:

Even if machine translation were able to eradicate all the language barriers between people, would there be no point in learning foreign languages? By no means.

Tip5:你再怎么不喜欢作文,考前3天请一定要写几篇练练。反正我是考前5天才开始弄作文,读读其他人的、背背句子、自己掐时间写写,不过后面也懒了,只写过度的地方,为了熟悉自己的句型,其他句子脑中过一遍就好了。

雅思作文句子——雅思大作文7分必备句型
很多同学雅思写作有三难:第一难写不出实质观点和内容;第二难写不出能加分的词汇表达;第三难受制于语法而写不出流畅严密的句子。麦考瑞雅思老师将帮助同学们从基础复合句型开始梳理,直到高级加分句型,将雅思写作观点和高分句型串联。帮助同学们获得观点和句型的合并提升,从而在词汇、观点逻辑和语法上直奔7分.

如果没有时间一一研究,麦考瑞雅思老师建议时间紧张的同学熟背下面12句话,再翻译成中文,最后限时翻译成引文比较:

1. When a language dies out, a whole way of life disappears with it. (表达一种后果的递进)

2. While some students drop out after a few years studying, others finish academic courses with poor degrees.(表达一个问题中两个对立的现象或者表现)

3. Many people in the countryside migrate into big cities, resulting in an increase in the demands for accommodation, food and services in urban areas.(表达什么因素或现象会引发什么后果)

4. Advertisements give people more choices on what they want to buy, giving rise to the consumer society.(表达一个事物或者原因引发的两个并列结果)

5. By spending money to protect minority languages, governments can also preserve traditions, customs and behaviours.(表达采取的手段和会达到的后果)

6. The use of private cars is increasing in Shanghai, and this puts a strain on its infrastructure.(表达某一现象和后果)

7. Instead of driving cars, people should use public transport.(表达两种路径或者方法,二选一)

8. The utilisation of cheap labour helps companies to reduce the production cost. This encourages business expansion. (表达某一事物和原因导致的两个并列结果)

9. Compared to those who hold high school qualifications, university graduates often have more employment opportunities.(表达对比)

10. If air travel is restricted, people would opt for other means of transport such as buses and cars.(表达假设及后果)

11. I partly disagree with the idea that advertising has negatively influenced our life, because I recognise several benefits it brings to society.(表达立场以及坚持这种立场的原因)

12. When the government pays for tuition fees, the constraint of finance is removed, encouraging a greater number of students to attend academic courses.(表达一种假设及引发的系列后果)

雅思7分句型分析

一、名词从句·环境篇

1、什么是名词从句?

名词性从句顾名思义,就是当成名词来使用的从句。它一般有几个特点:

· 本身是一个完整、独立的简单句。(最起码有主语和谓语动词)

· 前面一般会有个连接词that,但是这个that没有实质意义,只有语法功能,表示跟着一个名词从句而已。

· 名词从句要放在主句中的名词位置上,比如做主语、宾语、补语、同位语等。即,这个从句是当名词来用的。

2. 名词性从句放在不同位置上的表现(以雅思写作环境类考题为例,主要覆盖主语、宾语和同位语。)

名词性从句放在主语位置:在雅思大作文写作开头段里,很多名词性从句做主语并非以that为连接,而是以whether这个疑问词连接的,一般表达:XXX是否应该怎样还是个争议性话题。请注意下面划线部分就是一句话的主语,而主语从句里黑体部分则是点题的要素(即写作话题里需要考生注意覆盖的矛盾争议点和限定词)

话题:Scientists and tourists travel to remote natural environments, such as the South Pole. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Whether the trend will have negative influence on the local environments remains a controversial issue.

话题:Some industrialised countries have serious environmental problems. The damage to the environment is an inevitable result when a country tends to improve the standard of living. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Whether it should indispensably be entwined with the degradation of environment remains a controversial issue.

话题:Long distance flights use more fuel than cars and pollute the environment. We should discourage non-essential flights instead of limiting the use of car. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Whether restraining the unnecessary flights rather than limiting the use of the car remains a controversial topic.

话题:Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree on this hypothesis?

Whether only international cooperation is the essential way to tackle is a controversial topic.

话题:The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use your own experience and give an example to support your ideas.

Whether rising the gasoline price will dramatically solve it remains a controversial topic.

名词性从句放在宾语位置:这种句型在雅思写作中多用于表达观点、或者释义、转述时。

Communication between nations means that it provides a platform for people to create and spread expertise knowledge, as well as sharing respective resources.

这句话主语就是communication,谓语动词是means, 其实就是表达commnunication means something的意思。那么means后接了that,就是一个语法标记,引领之后的‘it provides...'这个宾语从句。

Opponents of such research argue that humans have no right to subject animals to this kind of trauma, and that the lives of all creatures should be respected.

这句话主语是opponents, 谓语动词为argue,不同的是它用了两个that引领宾语,这对于希望在同一个句子表达并列观点又担心连接词使用错误的同学是一个很好的模仿例子。

名词性从句放在同位语位置:首先厘清什么是同位语?其实不复杂,就是一个名词(或名词从句)对另一个名词或者代词进行解释,且和被它解释的词(句)要紧密挨着。在雅思写作中多用于陈述观点。划横线的两部分其实就是对等关系。

I agree with the view that if they can abide by certain rules during their stay, the advantages should outweigh the disadvantages.

My view is that pursuing economic development should not come at the cost of undermining environment, but be in a sustainable way.

3. 历年雅思写作环境类考题:建议同学们使用以上句型试着做两件事:表达争议和陈述自己的立场。

Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

Managing global environmental issues should be handled by one organization on a global scale. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Many agricultural lands are being converted into commercial centres. How does this affect the environment and the people’s life style?

Discuss this situation and provide suggestions. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.
Many efforts have been made by countries to address problems concerning the environment but, the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons and results of this situation? Discuss the situation and give suggestions. Provide reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.

The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Many believe that companies behind oil and gas production promote new boundless opportunities while others fear the results from their intrusion in nature. Discuss possible reasons, results and solutions.

Why do we need to prevent the extinction of some animals like dinosaurs and dodos if it is caused by natural processes? What is your opinion about this?

People produce more garbage than in the past. Explain how it is affecting us and the measures that could be taken to address the situation. Provide specific examples and explanation to support your answer.

In modern times, some species of animals are slowly disappearing. Do you think that it is acceptable l for species to become extinct? What are the possible reasons and consequences of this extinction? Provide reasons and examples to explain your opinion.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Protecting the Environment is the responsibility of the government. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Do you agree or disagree that the world was a better place decades ago that it is today? Why do you think so? Give specific details and examples to support your answer.

二、副词性从句·政府职能篇

1. 什么是副词性从句?

副词性从句本质功能是修饰,懂得基本语法概念的同学都知道副词修饰动词或者形容词,副词性从句也亦然。而且副词性从句有一个熟悉的名称:状语从句。

2. 副词性从句和名词性从句区别在哪里?

·功能不同(修饰的对象不同)

·连接词不同(名词性从句连接词以that 居多,而副词性从句连接词多种多样,可以表达逻辑关系,though,if,because等)

3. 副词性从句如何呈现多种逻辑关系?

表示原因:Firstly, it is obvious that the aim for establishing for-profit medical institutions is to make money, so they will definitely provide the best high-quality treatment and services to their customers, that is patients.

This is mainly because building the theatres and playgrounds are just beneficial to portion of citizens who are fond of them, rather than all people in the country.

表示条件 :Like air and food, if people living in the modern society would not rely on either the medical institutions or the education organizations, they would not at least survive, not to mention live comfortably.

If people are always struggling to find the ideal place to live, how could they expect to settle up and realise their other accomplishments?

另外,副词性从句用得比较多还有表示时间和地点。(when.until,after, where这样的词来连接)还可以表达目的(so that , in order that, in case),更可以表达让步,(although, while, whoever, whenerve,however等这些词,表达“不论”,“不管”意思)还有表达限制的,类似as far as这样的连接词。而且也要注意,副词性从句在口语中也是重要的构成:

Since we did not prefer package holiday, we chose to explore the place by ourselves, which would be flexible for us to travel.

When we were on the way travelling to there, we saw hordes of tourists along the road .

After finishing preparation stage, me and my older sister went sightseeing around the park, and it is interesting that although the park is not a famous destination.

What make me really want to have the job because I am fond of interacting with other people, then working in the work place will give me the chance to deal with human relationships, not to mention that a teacher from my university compliment on my leader skills and he said that I have the ability to organize people to work together and lead them to boost the productivity, which is one of the reason driving me to the job.

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